Bac Oral D'anglais Demain

Demain je dois passer mon oral de rattrapage en Anglais et j'aimerais trouver quelqu'un qui pourrait m'accorder quelques minutes de son temps pour me corriger cela : fautes de syntaxes de grammaire... Afin que je fasse un bon oral demain parceque pour que j'obtienne mon bac il me faut au minimum un 14 en Anglais !!
So HELP ME de toute Urgence
MERCI d'avance au personne qui serait suceptible de m'aider...


The story takes place in South Africa. The main characters are Madam Eve and her daughter, Thandi. During the apatheid Eve was Madam's slave, since the end they remained good friends.
1. It is the first school day for Thandi a black young girl. Her mother and madam and Madam accompanies her to the entrance of school and say her to enjoy herself.

2. Thandi meets two school young-boy-white.

3. One asks Thandi for what she is here. And the other one adds that this school was a great school until people as Thandi arrives.

4. By far Madam and Eve look at the scene and think Thandi is again a victim of rascisme.

5. Madam querels them, by explaining them that now it is the new South Africa. Where blacks and whites live together and have the same rights.

6. The boys are surprised of reactions of the ladies. Because the problem is not the skin colour of thandi, but the fact whether she is a girl. Cause this school used to an all-boys school.

7. A third black little boy makes his appearance. To show and press on the fact that the blacks are not a problem in this school but the girls yes! Furthermore for them the girls are Yucky !!

8. Madam et Eve Smile

9. But Thandi does not want that they get away like that.

Conclusion : To conclude, we can say that this comic strip raises the new problem of this society, the sexism.

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soit say, soit tells her, mais pas say her

pas de e à racism

"Madam querels them" : je pense pas que querel existe, tu dois probablement te baser sur a quarrel (une dispute). Mais même, to quarrel someone, je doute que ça se dise

"by explaining them that now it is the new South Africa" pas besoin de mettre le by au début, la forme ing ici exprime déjà le moyen

"Thandi is again a victim of rascisme." le again me gène, j'aurai plutot mis one more time (une fois de plus), mais ta phrase reste probablement correcte

"Cause this school used to an all-boys school." Celle là me parait encore plus bizarre. je suis pas sur que cause se dise lol. Tu dois vouloir dire because je suppose

"the blacks" Jamais the devant une généralité, ici il suffit de dire blacks. idem pour the girls après.

"but the girls yes!" Il aurait fallu dire but girls are

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Ce message a été modifié par Le Typhon Du Net - lundi 02 juillet 2007 à 18:30.

Sinon, d'après ce que tu dit c'est un oral. Le plus important pour l'oral, c'est parler lentement, ne pas se précipiter, utiliser des mots de liaison (Nevertheless, anyway, to conclude, First, Then, To my mind, Besides... j'en oublie plein )

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